This free poem was originally composed as free verse poetry many years ago, at a low point in my young life. While not the best poetry, at the time, everything felt like it was falling apart and I was expressing my emotions in a lot of ways, one of the more positive of which resulted in this poem.
The free verse poem underwent many revisions, becoming a more structured poem. Is it a love poem? Probably not. It’s the aftermath of a breakup. It’s sad poetry, an ending verse of love poems, where the love has unfortunately faded. Like most of our best poetry, this free poem started out based on personal events, but then became fictional poetry as the story progressed. This poetry is free for all to enjoy.
This poem is not my best poetry, and isn’t actually based on any single specific event that happened in my life. It was more the emotion that I was able to capture in almost a short story form, but didn’t have the physical energy or mental space to compose a full story arc and character development.
I simply wanted to write a poem that related to the way I felt at that time – which was broken.
Broken bottle on the sand
Message wrote in broken hand
Read aloud to broken cloud
A broken voice that once was proud
Eyes that broke before the sun
Broken words where tears have run
Broken love by broken friend
A broken heart time would not mend
Betrayed by speaker of broken vows
A false love that broken sight allows
A broken heart I tried to hide
Broken by pain I kept inside
Broken record, failed to start
Most of all a broken heart
A broken spirit, a broken will
Reality a dream that’s broken still
Broken glass still on the floor,
Evidence of a broken law
A broken bed where love once lay
Holds broken body on this day
Broken luck that had run dry
A broken lover that had to die
Paid the price for broken trust
A broken promise and a night of lust
I fly now with my broken wings
To a place where broken hope begins
A broken dawn where pains hold ceases
And I can gather all the broken pieces
As with all the best poetry, the reader often connects to different parts of the poem, finding interpretation and meaning which relate to their own lives.
While it’s not your average, positive home poem that you might hang on a wall, it will explain my original thoughts behind the story of the free verse that became a rhyming poem.
Verse 1: I imagine that somebody is walking along the beach and finds a message in a bottle. Upon reading the message on the shoreline beneath the open sky, holding a hand up to cover their eyes from the bright sunshine, a confession is revealed. They can see where the person penning the confession has shed tears on their writing, their hands shaking as they tell of a love betrayed.
Verse 2: This verse gives glimpses of the details contained within the note. Their happy reality has come crashing down from a betrayal they have uncovered. This is the emotional setup verse.
Verse 3: This verse is the action verse that follows the emotional one. This is what their pain caused them to do. It’s a sad poem of betrayal and murder.
Verse 4: While shamed or haunted enough by their deeds to have to write an anonymous confession, seal it in a bottle and cast it out to sea, the writer actually feels better for their actions. They are still hurt from what has happened, but have been able to pass a point of acceptance, if not quite ready to heal yet. There’s hope, and that’s the main thing, despite them getting away with murder. It makes the reader wonder what other secrets were cast into the sea that day.
Like most of my writing, despite being sad poetry, it does contain hope at the end. For some, this transforms it into an inspirational poem, despite the murder!
It will never rank among the famous poems. However, like much poetry, it contains a little piece of the author within its verse. It’s a poem about life and love and loss.
If you are have composed your own poem, you will find free poetry contests on my huge Writing Competitions List. There you can enter your poem into any of the free poetry competitions.
You could also submit your poem to any poetry magazine or journal on my List of Best UK Literary Magazines. Many of these poetry publications allow poem submissions all year round.
Best of luck with your writing!
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Aaron Mullins (@DrAaronMullins) is an award winning, internationally published psychologist and Amazon bestselling author. Aaron has over 15 years experience in the publishing industry, with expertise in business strategy for authors and publishers. He started Birdtree Books Publishing where he worked as Editor-in-Chief, partnered with World Reader Charity and taught Academic Writing at Coventry University. Aaron’s book How to Write Fiction: A Creative Writing Guide for Authors has become a staple reference book for writers and those interested in a publishing career. Find out more.